Review for Flames of Betrayal
To nitpick, however, the rest of this chapter felt, well, like filler almost. I think two scenes of James' life was a little redundant-you probably could've used the scene of James getting his letter, and still have made your "Harry regrets not having parents" point quite nicely. They were still quite enjoyable to read, and very well written, don't get me wrong, it was just a simple nitpick
Overall, a great chapter, aside from my little nitpick.
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