Whee! This is by far, one of the best ones you've written! I absolutely adore it! It's funny, dramatic, and easy to read! yay! Will you just leave it there? ^_^
Author's response
No, I'm going to carry on at some point! It's actually based on a film. I don't know if you've seen it but if you haven't, rent "SHaun of the Dead". :)