Review for Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage

Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage

(#) daled73 2008-04-08

Hey, now, forgetting canon again, are we???

Since Amelia IS A WITCH, being 60 0r 70 at present is just getting into early middle age, isn't it? She must be doing a heck of a job top be as highly placed as she is if she is ONLY 60 or 70.

On the Thor-esse, I think a could pf minor tweeks are needed, especially use of thy (possessive) then the context calls for Thee (You).

Even in the early 1990's I think American kids were being conditioned to use the term "Challenged" instead of "Slow" which had previously replaced "Retarded". If Harry was actually going for insult, he probably should have used the "Are they retarded?"

Other than that and comments previously made by others which I second, a wonderful Chapter indeed.

Author's response

- Of course I'm forgetting canon. I'm writing a fanfiction which is purposefully NOT canon.

- The Best there is at what she does...

- Hey, I wrote that at three am, be glad he wasn't speaking spanglish.

- Slow was an insult in the 60s, th '70s, the '80s and the '90s both in the US and the UK. Harry wasn't calling them retarded, he was telling them they were stupid.

- Thanks for the review...