it is a good piece of writing but...
some parts should have been expanded on such as his lover and bashing the ministry
i believe it would be a great pitch for a story and leaves great oppurtunities for a sequels. Probably starting when he wakes up from the hospital with a large flash back chapter... (i'm gonna stop ramling)
overall good work
it was an interesting fairly original idea
and i hope you continue writing
Author's response
Thank you for reviewing. I didn't intend to make it a very long involved story you know. It was just a plot bunny that presented itself earlier while I was reading Harry Potter and the Soul Gems on FFN. I do agree that it has potential to go further.