Review for Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage

Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage

(#) daled73 2008-06-03 12:55:47 PM

I continue to find this story very funny and enjoyable. A few minor points detract from it.

For instance the new CHapter 8 links back to Chapter 7, but somehow there is no forward line from Chapter 7 to chapter 8.

Also, in the terminology of "the Restricted Section" you occasionally commit "homonymicide".

“I say thee, I will be heard. Thou try my patients Mortals!”

The Wizards try Thor's 'patients'? I didn't know he had taken a medical degree somewhere. I believe you meant "patience".

I have found other cases of this, not too common, in your stories. While a spell checker will find invalid words, it will not help with valid words that are...well, WRONG.

Author's response

- The chapter linkage is a FICWAD thing, it will settle down in a few hours.

- Thor's alter ego is Dr. Donald Blake, and he indeed has patients to try

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