Review for Dirty Lips and Bloody Eyes

Dirty Lips and Bloody Eyes

(#) MarkPoa 2008-06-17 07:49:04 PM

This is a pretty good dark piece. I like the use of the two sentence stanza to break up the pacing. And the repetition of the title phrase was pretty good and haunting.

It feels a bit moralistic with the suicide at the end, but I think you might have been aiming for that.

Author's response

thanks!
yeah, i was in a pretty dark mood!
thank you again!

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