You have very, very poor grammar skills. You apparently do not understand the concept of sentences, since you don't have any. You use no punctuation, other than a few periods at the very beginning. You do not capitalize words correctly. Proper names (such as Harry, Ginny, Ron, etc.) should be capitalized. The first word of sentences should be capitalized. I was going to rate this story, too, but apparently it can't go any lower than it already is.