Review for Fate's Revenge

Fate's Revenge

(#) Nautilus 2009-05-15

nice story line so far, i look forward to where you take it...

the only negative is that it sometimes reads like. She did this and then this and she this and that... at times its reads more like a report then an actual story narrative... its something that you need to add a little detail into, otherwise great start.

ps... its a little early but is this a Rose/Sirius?