Review for Portals, Steam and Magic
Portals, Steam and Magic
(#) adrianbdean 2009-08-05 11:27:47 PM
I like this story and it's concept, but from reading this and comparing it to the other story I am unsure as to where the rewrite occurred.
Nonetheless, like I said, I like this story and look forward to more updates and hopefully a finished product this time around.
You do need to work on your spelling, grammar, and story formatting because I believe this will diminish the number of people that will read your story.
Because it is a creation of your own views of Victorian England when combined with the Magical World, I don't think you will have to worry about any mistakes dealing with the British gentry and such.
Overall, keep up the good work.
Nonetheless, like I said, I like this story and look forward to more updates and hopefully a finished product this time around.
You do need to work on your spelling, grammar, and story formatting because I believe this will diminish the number of people that will read your story.
Because it is a creation of your own views of Victorian England when combined with the Magical World, I don't think you will have to worry about any mistakes dealing with the British gentry and such.
Overall, keep up the good work.
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