i loved how you ended each section with 'he desperately desired to be'. it really helped connect each part and bring it together :) and it was all so true and deep. when i read the part about what people sacrifice to be a musician i was like, 'that's exactly it, that's how i feel,' you captured it perfectly =]
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I'm so relieved that I did the musician part some justice. That was the one part that I feared I wouldn't display correctly. And hearing that I captured it right from a musician yourself makes me so happy. So thank you so much :D