Superb. The last scene was very in character and certainly how I would expect them to both react. I love that she gives him something to fight for.
The scene where she asked him if he'd given up and he turned the question on her was rather powerful as well.
The only item that bothered me: "Those silent tears fell like cannon fire, leaving behind echoes so loud that they made the silence bleed."
The image has extraordinary potential; however, it doesn't seem fitting and just seems like you're working too hard to poor in flowery language. It risks melodrama. Sorry, I'm only trying to be constructive.
Well done, and my first favorite on here. Looking forward to your other work.
Author's response
I loved this review. Especially your criticism of that phrase. You're right--in the moment, it sounded fine, but as I reread it, it's a bit too much. And the repetition of the word 'silence' is starting to irk me now.
So thank you for bringing that to my attention. It really did help!