(#) ilex 2010-05-16
Good back story, good action, but somewhere in the middle you got your italic markers mixed up or forgot the /} thingy . . take a look and redo the markers ( I hate having to do the  thing to post my stories, but that's what this site wants . . . PITA! )
I saw that last nite when I went in and checked them all, but was too darned tired to fix it then. Will go back and do that today. thanks.