Review for Harry's Second Chance
(#) Locathah 2006-09-16 11:19:03 AM
For the rest of the story Harry's been actively manipulating people and events... and everyone has acknowledged that he'll be highly influential in Britain in the future. He hasn't shirked from this... the impression given is that he thinks the wizarding world needs to change and he's going to be a part of that.
Yet in this chapter you suddenly talk about him disappearing and heading to another country and another school etc etc... it seems very out of place to have him suddenly talking about leaving given the tone of the rest of the story.
I can't help but wonder if you need to re-read your own story :) Allot of Harry's actions in earlier chapters become pretty pointless if he's planning to disappear from the wizarding world just as soon as he kills Voldemort. I wouldn't be surprised if the changes he's tried to put in action begin to fall appart if Harry disappears - he's become a rallying point for the younger students.
Anyway... I've been quite enjoying the story but this chapter really did leave me scratching my head.
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