Review for Harry James Parker?

Harry James Parker?

(#) longreachjones 2010-12-19 12:36:00 PM

Very nice premise, I can see a very good story coming of this.

HOWEVER, this chapter feels to me like you just info dumped 2 or 3 chapters worth of story into a single chapter. Heck there are several sections of this chapter that could be fleshed out into whole chapters.

Moving the story along is fine, but please, please don't rush it.

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