Review for With The Venomous Kiss You Gave Me, I'm Killing Lonliness
With The Venomous Kiss You Gave Me, I'm Killing Lonliness
(#) paradoxicalcynic 2011-04-21 05:31:17 AM
Nice and original intro to the story and plot :)
Might want to use a little less description. Found that sometimes there seemed to be too much - maybe it's just me :P Remember less is always more :)
However, the majority of the story was pretty darn awesome!! You made use of characterisation, contrasting short and long sentences and description really well!!
Look forward to the next chapter :D
Might want to use a little less description. Found that sometimes there seemed to be too much - maybe it's just me :P Remember less is always more :)
However, the majority of the story was pretty darn awesome!! You made use of characterisation, contrasting short and long sentences and description really well!!
Look forward to the next chapter :D
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