This story isn't bad, like the others stated but... It might need a little bit of work(: it's better than anything i could do, but it still might need a bit of work if you know what i mean? O.O
Author's response
Yeah, I do know what you mean, and thank you for not flaming :) I understand it needs work, and that's why I've rewritten it :) (And added another chapter, check it out if you want). Thank you for not hating and leaving a decent review. :)