Review for The Little Merman

The Little Merman

(#) HarukosSlaveKitten 2011-06-17

I really like the twist on this old story.

However, I suggest breaking bits of it into smaller paragraphs.

Also I noticed a few spelling mistakes.

But overall this was a great story. I look forward to day 3.

Author's response

sorry about the spelling errors. I really try the best I can. As for the paragraphs I don't understand it. I would get confused, sorry if that bothers you. But otherwise thanks for liking my story. :)