Review for Dead, But Walking

Dead, But Walking

(#) fyre_byrd 2006-02-05 10:08:04 AM

This is an eerie strange little story. I think that the second person point of view works quite well for it considering the voices that Hojo seems to hear.

The confusion of past and present that the flashback seems to represent works well for your depiction of Hojo's insanity too.

These lines are especially powerful:
"If they take it away from you," she says, "then you will rebuild it."


You understand what the voice means. He will be your symbol. Your regret. Your redemption. Your feelings will be so strong in him that he will think they are his own. And you, free of those things, will continue while he remains dead, but walking.

Your writing is very insightful and an excellent depiction of Hojo's motives.

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