Review for I'll never let you leave, never let you breathe.
I'll never let you leave, never let you breathe.
(#) japulapu 2011-08-09 07:00:23 AM
You certainly are an expert at building the suspense. The short sentences are well built and powerful. Gerard's frustration is actually felt by the reader, thus making you want to read the next chapter. The choice sentences that trail off are well done, just adding to the mystery of it all. Some of the questions Gerard asks himself get a little repatitive, probably to emphasize the importance? That's all I have to say on this chapter. Well done.
Author's response
Well thank you very much. :)
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