Review for I'll never let you leave, never let you breathe.

I'll never let you leave, never let you breathe.

(#) japulapu 2011-10-01 09:03:56 AM

Ok. First, I love the title. Remembering Sunday. I was singing the rest like ' now he's dying to get inside'. Second, I think I got it. I'm pretty sure infact. I don't know why you thought it was confusing. Second of all, that ending had such a great impact. It was perfect. All the build up, all the tension, just for the same fate to befall him again. At least that's what I got. It was beautifully described. The part where Mikey died really got to me. Beautiful. Heartless and cold. It was great. I love how you mercilessly kill off your characters. Bob, ah, Bob. Who could imagine that little angel being so demonic? I think, throughout the story, his character is very believable. Gerard's disbelief and confusion. Well I don't blame him and Frank, they were completely wasted, but if you look at it from Bob's point of view, I would want to take revenge. But this is a touch far. But still, an amazing story. I think I've said a lot about your description, but this was amazing. It was beyond real. The reader can literally see everything. Brilliantly written. I have now run out of adjectives. You did an outstanding job. Congratulations.

Author's response

Okay, all I can say is wow. Lmao. I have never, in my life, been so flattered. Thank you so much. I should explain that bob and Marty are not dead, but they are injured. Incredibly. I shall explain it all in the epilogue. Well, thank you so so much. I hope you enjoy the last chapter.

You're a fantastic reader. So, thanks. :)

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