Review for Fate's Cruel if Life's Great

Fate's Cruel if Life's Great

(#) tortillachip 2011-12-20 05:42:21 PM

.....OH MY GOSH!!! This was so shocking!!!! You should see my reaction right now. My jaw is on the floor. This did not seem rushed or bad at all and I do not have a clue as to why anyone would think so. I did not see that last line coming. That was such a good comeback, but it was so mean, exactly what Gerard deserved. You always surprise me with this story. And I can't believe Gerard said that to Mikey!!! He was bound to say something like that to Frank, maybe it shouldn't have been so harsh, but we all know by now that in this story Gerard is a huge drama queen that probably has emotional problems. This killed me. I'm serious. My eyes would are Xs now and my tongue is hanging out of my mouth. Its only temporary, though. I shall come back alive when the next chapter is up. Phew, talk about a clever way to get all of that information to Gerard. I think Frank actually got it out (even the beating part) to Gerard pretty well. Gerard doesn't know how to deal with anything. I feel so bad for Mikey. First he gets yelled at and is made fun of for his stutter by his own flesh and blood, then he gets attacked in an alley, then Frank takes him in(which isn't really bad) then Gerard calls him pathetic, then some old lady is just starting with him for no reason,
and then Frank pushes him away after kissing him, then he's unsuccessful in his attempt to kill himself (to him this is a bad thing) then Gerard says he wishes Mikey was dead. All the bad things happen to him, which I kinda thought was done on purpose because he's so insecure and he's got a reason for it. That was just all the stuff that happened in the story, who knows what happened before. I also thought it was to show that there's a reason he wanted to kill himself. Frank pushing him away was the final push. I think Mikey shouldn't ever forgive Gerard for what he said, but that's just my opinion. I also liked that this was in Frank's point of view this time. It worked really well, and plus I think it just added to the last line he says. If I had written this (and I wish I had) I'd be super proud of it. You should be really proud of this. It's incredible. I think this is my number one favorite chapter so far, and not just because of the last line. I think it was very well written and it caused your readers to get caught up in it, too caught up, and it had the perfect pace to it. It was definitely not rushed like you thought it was, but it wasn't so long that it got boring. It was perfectly paced and just pulled you into it. I shall be waiting for the next chapter, but I'll probably be shaking with the need to know what happens next.

Author's response

Thank you very much; it's a huge relief that you didn't think that this was boring!
I think Gerard deffinitely has emotional problems in this story; maybe some anger management issues?I feel bad for Mikey too and I'm the one making all of this crap happen to him! Maybe I should be a little nicer to the poor boy... Yeah, everything has been directed towards him in this story and you're spot on with the reason.
Thank you sooooo much for taking the time to leave such a nice and detailed review; I'd hug you if I could! :)

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