Browsed the last couple of chapters but there does seem to be a little improvement in writing quality compared to the start though a long way to go. The story still is promising.
This Defence class started interestingly enough but then totally left me baffled when it abruptly ended a minute later without any teaching at all. What is all that about? That is not good storytelling. You need to give the students' reactions, their annoyance at the class being cancelled, etc. otherwise the reader is left confused and wondering if you've just lost ten paragraphs or something?
Author's response
Sorry it took me log to comment, i have been really busy. Glad you think its improving. I will take your comments on board and maybe edit it but will be after awhile as I am very busy with school right now.
Keep reviewing i really appreciate it.
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Claire xx