Hm... Well. Fuck. That was lovely. I loved it.
NOW FOR THAT PART I ALWAYS DO THAT TAKES FOR FUCKING EVER AND IS KINDA MEAN BUT NOT REALLY FECK YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN!
Please, please please please PLEASE go through it and change the & to the proper word 'and'! Ugh! That is just one thing I really don't like, just makes me want to fucking scream. (Um... I hail from planet strange.) the story was lovely, but WHY DID YOU HAVE TO WRITTEN THE SEMI SOPHISTICATED EFFECT WITH THE SYMBOL OF SATAN?!? You kill me, man. You really do.
Second- I know how fucking easy this is to do, I think I accidentally do it quite often myself, but there are places you have a period (.) instead of a space ( ). (No, I don't think you're stupid I just wanted to put I the right symbol... Or lack of.)
Hm... It bugs me when people do 'ok' instead of 'okay', but I'm pretty sure most people don't mind and it's only considered incorrect in some forms of the English language.
That's really all I got-- it was a good story, and I can't wait for an update of My Psychotic Romance. I really like your work (thus the fucking long reviews), so please update! Hm... One day, I'm going to write you a review longer than your chapter. (count on it)
UPDATE! AND O WILL STAKE YOU BECAUSE I AM A BITCH!!! LOL note the username ;)
Have a nice day! (yeah, jut had to end it on that fucking positive note xD)