Review for Five Days To Convince Gerard Way.
(#) monstrice901 2012-04-15 03:31:12 PM
It's generally quite well written, but there are a few grammar mistakes (sorry!). It's nothing major in terms of the actual story, but I have noticed that you tend to skip on capital letters and shit like that. Also, it'd be easier to follow if you did new speaker = new line. Sorry, I'm just being pedantic, but these things bug me!
Great story so far, and can't wait for more!
Don't apologize, I appreciate the fact that you're trying to help my writing to improve. I've also noticed my little grammar mistakes and I do apologize for them. I normally write the beginning of every word with a.capital so sometimes I'll rewrite them and accidentally take it too far and miss a few or change it without realising it needed to stay the same. If it'd be easier for the readers to follow I will definitely start making sure that new speakers get their own lines. I do appreciate constructive criticism and I will try my best to improve in future chapters.
Thank you for the review!
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