Review for Phantoms

Phantoms

(#) XxPerfectTomorrowxX 2012-04-22 03:22:35 AM

Just started reading and I'm already astounded with the amount of detail you've put in to this. 'His intelligent brown eyes flickering as they traced hair-thin cracks that were starting to show'- That line was just so incredibly detailed... Love it!
And that was just the beginning of it. All through out this one-shot you amaze me with the detail. You truly did put time and effort in to this and it clearly shows.

His dad is drunk and it's not even 11 PM! Wow. I'm not even that bad. X.x It's so sad how he showers him and gets him in bed. I mean, it's really sweet but... poor guy!
I was glad to read that he wasn't a violent drunk though. I mean, hell I love to build off of that and make drunk people violent but it's so GREAT to read where they aren't violent once in awhile. :p

Oooh, it's past 3 am here so I feel I must clarified what this spooky story was trying to say:
So, phantom Brendon is haunting alive Ryan and Phantom Ryan is haunting alive Brendon?

That's intense.
My god.

I know this is a one-shot but so much could be done!
I want alive Brendon and Ryan to meet. I want to know why they are being haunted by their other halves... I WANT TO KNOW EVERYTHING!
This left so much up in the air but it was sooo good.

I can't believe it took me so freaking long to read.

Author's response

I can't believe it took me so freaking long to respond! XD But that's because I kept squealing every time I saw this... Be prepared for a loooonng reply! :D

Wow, thank you! And that wasn't even one of my favourite lines that I thought were detailed! I can't remember which one it was, but there was one particular line that I loved in there somewhere. Yeah, I really did. I was totally in love with this idea from the start, which is why that I spent ages writing and rewriting sentences, trying to make them sound better. My big obsession was trying to make it creepy enough.

Ha, seriously, I just kinda made up a time for that. I didn't want it to be too late, but then it couldn't be too early. I think originally I had 9pm, but then I was like, 'Dude, no way is he gonna come home drunk THAT early!' and made it a later time. The looking after thing I actually got from the Rolling Stone interview that Panic! did in... '06? '07? I can't remember. But it mentioned how Ryan's dad had died like, a few months ago and that he'd often had to take care of him when he came home drunk. Then later on, Ryan went on to talk about the funeral and how he missed him, and I just couldn't make his dad a violent drunk after reading that. Plus, it's way over done and too cliched. I can send you a link to that particular part in the interview, if you're interested.

Wow, that's late. You didn't have to stay up and read this for me... But it makes me all warm and fuzzy that you did. And yup! You got that spot on! Hah, that's what my friend said when I told her my plan for it.

Well, you'll be happy to hear that I am considering continuing it; for more info, read the Author's Note that I just stuck up.

I don't care how long it took you. I'm just glad that you were able to read it. :3

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