(#) CourtneylovesKurt105 2012-07-27 06:39:02 PM
It's not spelling issues you have. You have grammar issues. So many too. My advice, use Spell Check. It's very illiterate. It really distracted me from the story itself I'm saddened to say. BUT, at the parts that I could actually pay attention at I must say, you do have potential as a writer. Your skills will soar if just edited, though. I don't quite get the whole fight scene between that guy. I do hope you plan on building on that and explaining a little more. Overall, good story. Very interesting plot. I do hope you continue you :)
thanks for the review i know it has alot i will redo promise and with fight scene my mom might say something if i wrote it too extreame but i will add more detail its hard but i will redo it and make it better and thanks for not ripping me to shreads and junk im still working on it so ... it will be better :D "when in dubt try try again"
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