Review for YinYang: - How it could have been
The grammar could be better. You don't usually need a comma before "because," for instance. You don't need to capitalize the "the" in "The Titans" unless it starts a sentence.
"Fought with us instead of her?" I don't see Beast Boy fighting against the other Titans in any case. At most, he'd use his powers to try to break up the fight, but he'd never attack.
Poignant, but the ending could be stronger.
The night before turning 17 Harry discovers that he is adopted, and an ALIEN. Harry finds out he is ...
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Yes, yes, auditions. Note added.
More auditions. Haven't done this in a while. Notes added.
Could you walk away from everything you know? Start again with a dangerous stranger? Could I do it? ...
"So you're like, my bitch now?" :FRERARD:
It's Roxanne's first year of high school. This'll be fun. Not.