The way you write dialogue does things to me, oh my god. It's actually alive and strikingly human, I mean, damn girl. Plus, I love how you just give a prologue with less than 500 words and suddenly we know what shit is about to go down, that's fucking talent, dude, I'm so excited to see this pan out, you have no idea.
I'm going to be eagerly awaiting the next update. :D!
-S
P.S. - you totally deserve all the reviews. Idk how the system works for readers to leave a tidbit of what they thought for you, but I'm sure they're just a little awestruck and intimidated at your skills.