Hey great story, love the whole ideal! I downloaded your story off of your website but your right it being not beta-ed I couldnt read it, it was so bad, so I guess I will just have to wait for each beta-ed chapter to come out.
Author's response
I agree that it needs to have a lot of work, this one. I am also rewriting some parts of it, especially the lemon scenes. They are truly disgusting and unsatisfying. Much too less.
Now I have a more dirty mind, I am going to get my imagination loose at them. I can not publish those lemons on the FF.Net, but I can at FicWad.