Review for To Fight the Coming Darkness
To Fight the Coming Darkness
(#) afdd 2006-12-15 08:48:32 PM
I don't understand why Susan would deserve to see Harry's memories. Nor do I understand why she would be fighting Voldemort. I doubt he would come for her personally again, and she certainly hasn't earned a level of trust that would give her the right to ask Harry to see his memories. I thought you said things would be moving slowly between them. The entire situation is quite unrealistic. Other than that, the story seems decent so far. Well, mostly. Harry's "ability" to make a wandless portkey because he's so familiar with the magic seems ludicrous, but I have a feeling that the majority of your story is based around his penchant for that, so whatever. I suppose realism is relative.
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