"The Teachings of Yevon were coming apart at the seams. So much the better."
I just want to take a second to heap praise on this very insightful little line, it's simply perfect!
The first image we get of Lulu is fantastic, very moody, very atmospheric and (dare I say) very sexy.
I completely envy your combat writing skills, you make it sound so smooth and easy. In a way the battle feels like foreplay which works really well for these two!
"A fine layer of ash and dirt rained down on them, as pyreflies spiraled away." - Fantastic image that is going to stay with me for quite a while! (tiny point: there are two L’s in spiralled)
The dialogue is beautiful, it works so well and sounds very natural.
I'm not surprised that Lulu would want to test herself and to be in private when she does so and despite his jibe relating her to Tidus (heehee) I think he would be the only one to respect that wish and Lulu's independence.