Review for To whom it may concern

To whom it may concern

(#) Rous 2007-02-15 05:18:45 AM

Very nicely constructed. However, there is a lot missing. Is this part of something bigger?

I did find a couple of niggles.
Third paragraph- worrying to worrisome.
Fifth paragraph- commenced means beginning.

Again, a good story, as far as it goes.
Thank you for sharing.

rous

Author's response

Commenced does mean beginning, which was the intent. You're right about this being a part of something bigger. It's the only part that's really been put into story form though, and I don't foresee any other part of it getting into such a form. If some other idea comes up, I'll do it, but I wouldn't hold my breath.

I came back to reread some of my old stuff after a while, and hey, in the fifth paragraph commenced is used wrong. Sorry for brushing you off, I thought I had used it oddly, but intentionally, somewhere else, and didn't bother to investigate. Maybe that'll show me.

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