Review for Doom

Doom

(#) MarkPoa 2007-02-26 12:14:16 AM

That was entirely unexpected that I experienced being first disappointed at the ending, then chuckling to myself.

A better "sound" word may make the poem better... "thunk" doesn't seem to gel properly with the other words you've used.

Author's response

Yes, I do think I need a better sound word. Does "thump" sound any better? I'm not sure....well, if any one has any suggestions to replace "thunk," please tell me! ~alloreli

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