I'd have to agree that this was only adequate, but it did show good promise. I think my main complaint is that the imagery and words used here are a bit plain and rather than being moving, seemed to just be.
On the positive side, though, your attention to the structure of the free-verse, a coherent thought and theme, and good spelling made this look competent and better than some of the other stuff here in Ficwad. Keep writing!
Well, this WAS an english project. I needed to make sure I included all the necessary parts, which meant I wasn't concentrating as much on the words used then what I was saying. I really prefer to write free-verse. You'll notice that I don't have any sonnets or that kind of stuff on here.