(#) aiIenzo 2007-03-10 08:59:58 PM
Okay, to be honest, I was a little stetchy on reading this, because a lot of people bullshit on their profiles about their stories and whatnot, but I can honestly say that this was a welcome surprise. You said it was inspirational, and it most definately was. The conclusion was percise and seemed to flow back in to the entire speech above it, and it made a really wonderful effect. Bravo on the topic, and great work writing it :)
That's kind of why I need people to tell their friends about it. I hesitated to use such a title (and post the story's information on my profile) for fear that it might turn a lot of people away, but at the same time it's the only thing that really works. You see, I have an obsession with wanting to leave the reader with a last thought (I love open endings, too, but let's not get into that). The last line has to be immensesly important. The story should have the first and last words, not me. I save all the goop for my profile. I wish there was a better way to do it, but there really isn't. I hope that made sense to you.