Review for Perfection Fades

Perfection Fades

(#) Akito 2007-03-20 04:10:33 PM

Holy moly, that scared me. Something about the way you wrote it...I felt like it was all happening to me.
I think it was a bit overdramatized, but other than that it was captivating. I think you wrote everyone's character very well, especially Yuki's, and I agree with you that he probably has that problem--cutting. It just seems to fit him. Everyone thinks he's so perfect, and he's under so much pressure to be perfect all the time; that, coupled with his traumatic past, lends itself to that theory. I believe he needs an outlet but he doesn't have one, except that of his own perfect skin. Hey, that's cool, I should use in a story or something...lol. I really am that conceited.
Anywho, good job on this. It was great. Keep up the good work and don't let anybody tell you that you wrote Yuki OOC; you write him better than any other writer I've ever encountered (excepting, perhaps, myself).
Here's my email if you want to chat about poor, abused Yuki sometime. ^_^
akito_sweet_insanity@yahoo.com

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