Review for What a Night
(#) jerseygirlxx 2007-04-16 12:56:13 PM
then you say 'I only want people to listen.' again what people? isnt he only 'speaking' to Mikey?
Plus the in the beginning when you say do you remember when we met? Again- huh? theyre brothers a few years apart so im guessing no. I thought maybe he was talking to a girl he loved for while until I figured out it was Mikey.
I also found the concept of life support confusing. From what I know, which isnt much about life support,
You usually cant talk on life support - ya know breathing machines and such. So its strange how he talks to the nurse. It would be creepier if he cant talk and he can hear them but cant reply. And he knows that hes running out of time cause theyre coming to pull the plug so to speak.
I totally got the whole repenting for his sins vibe. And I liked how he was unafraid at the end.
Overall though good creepy story. Hmm how come theres no rating for creepy? Im gonna go with moving.-xoxo
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