Harry and Hermione uncover the true facts of Halloween night.
(#) Snowdove30 2008-07-05 01:32:18 PMAnother excellent update. Good choice on all the memory strands copied. I'm not surprised that seeing his murder caused Harry's magical maturity to start. Glad Hermione is there with him. I hope Hermione gets an oath from Bill and Fleur not to reveal their location or what they were doing.Thanks for posting.
(#) ROBERT_1958 2008-07-05 06:16:02 PMOn Harry's & Hermione's trip, it would be nice for them to stop by places Harry owns.
While visiting the places Harry owns Harry & Hermione could learn more about Harry's history.
I realy like Harry & Hermione taking a trip together.
One of the reasons I like Harry & Hermione stories is that they both are from the muggle world and can blend in both Magical & Muggle worlds.
I have always wonderd why Harry could not go site seeing like anyone else.
Thanks for writing this finne story.
Looking forward to more.
(#) jump_jives 2008-07-05 08:07:37 PMThis was a very well developed chapter. I like how your including information from the final book without it actually following the final book. As I mentioned in my review of the last chapter, I like the way the relationship is evolving without seeming forced. Obviously there are no love potions involved in this relationship.
In summation, this is a really good, relaxed story and I have been enjoying it greatly. Keep up the good work.
Couple minor fixes to do if you ever reposet or post it somewhere else:
“Mummy?” Harry said causing heroine to stop the replay...
Hermione may be addictive to some, but I can't seem to imagine shooting up with her. :)
“Loot at Peter he’s as close to the door as possible.”
Should be look. ( acouple of jokes came to mind for this but they all sucked so I'm not going to make them).
...giving Hermione just enough time to warp Harry in her arms...
I would have expected Harry to feel anything but bent in Hermione's arms, in fact, the term straight as a board comes to mind (though obviously not in this situation). I believe you were going for wrap.
Author's responseI do appreciate you pointing out my errors. I'm on my own writing/reviewing/and fixing what I find wrong.
That is one reason for the time between updates.
Knowing what is slipping through improves my reviewing/error checking.
Thanks for all your reviews
- ::wicked chuckle:: Neither the Order nor Tommy-boy and his "merry men" are going to appreciate the results of this "learning experience". It should be quite interesting to see what Harry found in that book. Meanwhile, I rather suspect his improved skill with a sword is going to help matters with and for the Warlocks. On top of all this, Harry is making firm friends in a lot of unusual places and that is bound to cause the Order heartburn at a later date; likely Tommy-boy, too.
I love the slowly developing level of intimacy between Harry & Hermione and I suspect the final result is going to pleasantly shock and surprise both of them.
(#) jabarber69 2008-07-06 03:39:50 AMHey cool story! I also saw your a/n at the beginning of this chapter. The part about you dont think your ripping off anybody's ideal...I dont really understand what the big hoopla is about taking someone's ideal and then going in a different direction, as long as your story doesnt sound just like there or go bascially the same direction then whats wrong with it. I personally have seen and used others peoples ideals for my stories, I just took their ideal and made up my own story going in my own direction different from theres. Anyway what's the big hoopla about, face it were all guilty of using other peoples ideals, the main example is were all using rowlings ideal of and on Harry Potter stories!