Neville and Tracey return to Hogswarts, Hermione learns something about Harry, Justin and herself, and other stuff happens.
- That was a very good chapter, Clell. For all it was slow-paced, it really contained some golden character moments.
I particularly liked Neville's conversation with Hermione and also Harry and Daphne trying to work out what the hell they are supposed to do now. As Harry said, he isn't good at planning ahead. Griffindors charge forwards, after all. He is going to need Daphne to teach him cunning (or at least supply her own to any strategic discussions). Of course, compensating for the deficiencies of one's mate is one of the roles of a wife or husband.
I like how you portray Hermione in this story. For all she is a very intelligent young woman, she is not overwhelmingly smart in real terms. She needs someone dilligent and caring to protect her from her naievette and who better than a noble-born Hufflepuff?
The bit with Ron was funny. I wonder if the Weasleys are planning a poorly-thought-out and ultimately self-defeating counter attack.
Things are working towards a conclusion. I'm looking forward to the final exposure and ruinatino of Dumbledore for all his many crimes. We also need to see how Lord and Lady Potter settle into their new roles.
BenRG's Rating: 8/10
Author's response- Most of my stuff is slow paced... Much like myself.
- It always seemed to me that with the culture that canon showed (and fanon amplified) someone like Neville would have been raised to take no crap off anyone
- I've never cared for stories that have a couple pair up and start finishing each others sentences (except for the Twins of course), like most new couples (Hell, like many new marriages) Harry and Daphne are basically strangers.
- It has often been noted that being highly intelligent doesn't necessarily make one smart. What ever else Hermione is, she is a dedicated follower of the rules, bringing her into Harry's secret is a risk. It always seemed to me that while Hermione has a fair amount in common with Harry (several orders of magnitude more than she has in common with Ron) she would have far more in common with a Muggle born with a normal upbringing.
- Ron's not done
- I'm planning on chapter 14 to be the final...
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-09-25 02:29:41 AMBrilliant update. I caught myself wondering where Ron was early on before I remembered what he'd done in this story. I guess that's my not-so-subtle way of saying it's been a while. Then again, I can't talk, since I haven't updated any of my stories in far longer.
Looking forward to more.
Author's response- I was amazed when I looked it up, two months to the day between chapters of Marriage Contracts... Totally accidental in that, just the way it worked out.
(#) morriganscrow 2008-09-25 08:38:31 AMSo glad to see a new chapter from you!
Loved your kick-arse Neville, and the way he and Hannah got the message through Hermione's bushy bonce.
Also loved the way the lads were fooling Dumbles, who will indeed deserve everything that's coming to him.
The part between Harry and Daphne was very nicely written indeed. I have high hopes for them.
The last bit with Ron makes for some very interesting speculation. I look forward to reading more.
- Nice chapter. I like that Harry and Daphne are healing away from Hogwarts for a bit, but in all the time passing there you avoided plainly stating that they didn't come back either.
I liked how Hermione seems to have matured, especially with regards to sex, but I do sort of wish the confrontation with Ron was more public. I wonder who his pure-blodded shag was that didn't want to share and what happened with her.
What really got me thinking was that Omake by Dave Brown where DD makes his own Horcrux by murdering his sister! Now that is an idea!
- Heh, I love the developing relationships here, you write Neville/Hannah, Harry/Daphne, and Justin/Hermione quite well and realistically and I like how each relationship develops at its own pace. Harry & Daphne working things out between them has a very realistic feel and the two do seem to fill each other's weak points quite nicely (I doubt wizarding society is going to appreciate having to deal with such an energetic and competent team). Getting the message through to Hermione was amusing and it's good to see her depicted as sharp, but not all knowing. I do like how your depicting how Harry & Neville trained while totally fooling Dumbles. Finally, that bit with Ron was perfect for setting him down in his deserved place; I doubt the Weasleys are going to be too overjoyed about the marriages their youngest two make since the best choices have been removed by the Weasley's own choices.
The omakes were amusing; though Plan B was somewhat moreso than the other.