Chaos theory; a nargle flaps its wings in China, and Luna responds differently to Harry during their conversation before the leaving feast.. AU starting near the end of OoTP. Harry/Luna/Hermione. N...
- Very well done. I love to have an elevated pulse at the end of a chapter, and you tend to deliver. It's also nice to see that charming Swedish official:-).
I enjoyed the cousin banter, and i have a feeling we haven't heard the last of "Three", and i truly adored the Great Smackdown of the Interfering Old Coot.
Hmm. Could Harry use his Head-ship to call Tonks names without retaliation? Oh, and please let Harry see the girls cuddle. Just to open his mind, by dynamite. Give him some troubling dreams and such. Tonks could also use some seriously poor judgement in choosing shapes for bathing. Just some ideas.
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-09-28 07:16:44 AMWell, that was a heck of a chapter. To start with, it was so fun to see that moment with Tonks there, and honestly don't know why JKR didn't let Harry know about his relations to anyone else, unless it was what was needed to drive him to his death. The will reading also rocked, and glad to see that Harry might have a new ally with Amelia there, and that he was able to help Susan out. You know, I will look forward to the ramifications of what Draco did, and how Narcissa might take to what chance Sirius and by extension, Harry will do for her if she takes that opportunity. Here's hoping that as Harry grows fonder of both Hermione and Luna, that Hermione can use her Gryff courage to charge ahead. Wonderful part.
- If a tree falls in the woods and no one is there to hear it, does it make a sound? If a well-meaning but poorly acting man makes an apology that goes unheard, is he truly sorry? And if he is sorry, is he sorry for what he has done or that his plans have not worked out?
I'll admit that you had me going with Fawkes, I had thought he had transferred his allegience to Harry, meaning he had already abandoned Albus. Then when he flew to Albus's shoulder in the meeting I thought, as Harry did, that he had just been recovering with Harry. Then you have him fly back to Harry when Albus left! Has Fawkes truly moved to Harry, or did Albus give him some sort of silent command to watch over Harry and perhaps kidnap him at a more opportune time? We know that Albus is that devious, but is Fawkes?
And what about that bad feeling Harry had about DD's explaination for Minerva's stunning? What about it was so fishy? Admittedly, anything Albus says should be considered an attempt at manipulation first and foremost, regardless of whether or not it is the truth.
Nice chapter, funny with the will, intricate with Harry being pulled out of the meeting before hand to sign his emancipation (By the way, Amelia's sighing, does that mean that she isn't thrilled to be forced to follow Albus either?), and touching with Tonks and Harry reuniting as family. Really, really well done.
(#) animemonster 2008-09-28 08:35:19 PMExcellent as always. I'm always so shocked by you not falling into the common pitfalls of cliche and bad writing. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapters and beyond.
Author's responseHi Animemonster,
Thanks for reviewing again. Avoiding cliche's is one of my goals. I decided that if I was going to try and write a story, I wanted to write something different, rather than just rehash what others had already done. After all, many of my readers are going to have read the same fics that I have, so what would be the point of following those same story paths? They might as well re-read what's already out there, instead of having to wait around for me to update.
But of course there are some things that can't easily be avoided even though they are cliche; Siri's will & the shopping trip for example. I figure the best I can do is try and focus on adding my differences to that plot device, since leaving it out entirely would make the story unbalanced. The story still needs to be able to stand alone after all.
Thanks for letting me know I'm achieving my goal. :)