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Daddy Dearest
(#) DrT 2008-10-25
I know showing an entire class would be boring, but your classes seem to last 5 minutes. . . .Daddy Dearest
(#) Cateagle 2008-10-25
chuckle I doubt the head mistress expected him to remember his treatment there or want to do the right, not easy, thing. It should be interesting to see what, if any, repurcussions derive from that. Meanwhile, I do like the slow development of 'most all the elements of a family. I wonder how long it'll take them to finally break down and admit to each other how they feel?Daddy Dearest
(#) DarQuing 2008-10-25
The story seems to be coming along ok, but there doesn't seem to be much conflict in it. Or is the conflict more personal? The inner conflict of love and perceived reality (Harry and Hermione know they love the other, reality (they don't think that the other loves them the same way) versus reality (the love on both sides is returned in equal measure).
That being said, I agree with DrT, there must be more to the classes than that.
Overall, though, keep up the good work and update soon. :)Daddy Dearest
(#) jjracer24 2008-10-25
I'm quite enjoying this story. Everything seems to be falling into place for our hero, are you planning on introducing any of the other professors at Hogwarts?Daddy Dearest
(#) Mionefan 2008-10-26
pretty good, but I would have liked to have heard Carla's explanation, not just that Harry read her mind. That would have put the headmistress in proper perspective than for Harry to just arbitrarily pull her out of school without hearing Carla's explanation (after all, the headmistress isn't a legillimens.Daddy Dearest
(#) Alorkin 2008-11-07
I think I should rephrase a comment I made before: The mean distance from the west side of London (Charing Cross Rd/Kings Cross Rd and therefore # 12, which is about twenty minute walk from Kings Cross) to the ‘middle’ of Surrey is roughly 138 km.
Harry’s going to have to tell Carla what to call him. ‘Kiddo’ in an Americanism. 'Poppet' or 'pet' would be more appropriate.
Your explanation of the development of the unforgivables, is absolutely brilliant!
I hate guys like that! They make me ashamed to have been born male. Now’s the time to contact other former residents, specifically females, and ask them if the landlord made the same ‘request’ of them. Things like this are not isolated incidents. I’d imagine that while he might have covered himself legally, he could be bankrupted very quickly, if word 'got around'. Still, it gets Hermione into Harry’s house on a constant basis.
My thought was that the curse affects the brain directly, hyperstimulating the ‘pain center’ there, but your explanation makes equal sense.
Pretty much the way it was at my school. The school officials would turn a blind eye to the bullying, even when it took place right in front of them, but when a student had had enough and struck out, they’d be all over him or her.
Sweetly done, and now, Carla has something to call Harry.
If only I was qualified to homeschool my daughter, (and I didn’t have 10-14 hour days on a construction site.) I would do the same. As it is, I give her additional instruction in the areas she is having difficulty in.
As always, a pleasure.
Alorkin
Daddy Dearest
(#) stonewar 2011-02-17
"humanely kill livestock before slaughter" this is a silly redunancy. :) Try "Humanely slaughter livestock"
IF Winky is in the household why have you had Harry impose upon and pay friends to watch the kids?
The end was genuinely sweet. And now the suggestion I made earlier doesn't work...How about shifting this to mid school year where is would be more convenient to allow her to finish the school year. what with the ease of wizarding transportation. That way he still gets to rescue her.
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