So Im really liking your story and think so far its been pretty great but do you think you could go back and add some dates to things?
The time line seems to jump around a little and even if it doesnt, its rather hard to follow.
Thats all I had, oh yeah as if it needs to be said Update! j/k. Keep up the good work!
- Okay, this is a nice expansion on what's posted on Portkey. I rather like the way you're fleshing things out more thoroughly and I'm looking forward to seeing some interesting interactions with Dumbles, the Order, et al. as they try and deal with a whole new element thrown into the mix; especially if they throw in that they were commissioned by Harry Potter.
I'll definitely be looking forward to future installments.
(#) twilliams1797 2008-11-06Daaaaymmm you're only 17? I am so F**ng jealous.. to have the talent to write this (and others)at the tender and innocent age of....er..you are innocent, right? (the correct answer is "I've never been caught, so of course I am" )
(snaps to attention) I salute you, young bard!
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