by Shadow_Rebirth
8 Reviews
Category: Harry Potter -
Rating: PG-13 - Genres: - Characters: -
Published: 2008/11/10 - Updated: 2008/11/11 - 6262 words
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Ok, possibly a dumb question here, but what exactly is a beta for? Is it just a proof reader or what? If that's all it is let me know because I'm really good at that kind of thing. I usually proof read my friend's papers and fix sentences for them so stuff sounds better, only problem is I am in the Navy and a single mom to a 9 month old so sometimes I get busy, but for the most part I'm free a lot of the time. If you're interested, email me at leodragonchic@yahoo.com then delete this if you can because I hate having random people email me.
Great story by the way, looking forward to the next chapter ^_^
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Pretty good work with this update. I'm beginning to have a bit of trouble keeping track of some of the characters' races, though. Damion and Ryan are easy enough to remember, but once you start moving into other races it's a bit tough.
Looking forward to more.
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(#) laganima 2008-11-12 09:34:33 PM
Good story. On the misspelled words thing, i suggest you get fire fox and write it in your email account. fire fox underlines all misspelled words so you can right click them and pick a word from the list. it helps a lot.
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(#) DrT 2008-11-13 06:59:06 AM
Lots of teasers in this chapter, from the vampires to an attack on Hogwarts! Those make me anxious for the next chapter, even without an actual cliffhanger
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(#) lycus 2008-11-13 01:50:45 PM
That was a cool chapter, And I was wondering who would figure out who Harry really was. And the switch back to Hogwarts was great in how it showed that Hermione was missing her man a lot, And how it really was Harry that kept Voldemort away from Hogwarts and not Dumbledore, But it also showed that without Harry the students were helpless and unfocused with out Harry there. And I know about what you said about the whole relationship thing but are you saying that Harry won't date at all, Or that he won't have a serious relationship until he gets his Hermione.
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(#) Vanir 2008-11-14 07:47:10 AM
Still intrigued.
I agree with all of the above, up to and including the beta offer. However, I prefer OpenOffice to both Word and the Firefox mailer.
On this genuflecting note: Thanks, and keep at it.
Vanir
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good story, like it a lot. Its original and well written. There is a problem though. Its not about the story but you seem to use to many italic words. It just doesn't flow right. but keep up the work and update soon.
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