Something in Harry changes that summer between fourth and fifth year. At his trial he discovers what someone has been hiding from him since he was born.
(#) jabarber69 2008-12-27 11:54:00 AMWoW that was great and well worth the wait! So I take it the voice is his mum? love to see all the manipulations of dumbydork unravelling, I hope you also show when the wizengamot looks at the other proxy's that dumbydork has and finds out that he forged or outright lied in claiming all those proxy's and estates...maybe a little jail time for the great manipulator wouldnt hurt!
Oh yea and about the flamers, I find that most flamers havent ever written a single story anywhere on the net! I usually dont flame someone other than to tell them they need to get a spellchecker or proof read their stories really bad....In your story, your doing okay except that the name of parkingson in your story is actually parkinson and treacy is actually tracy!
- I am sorry to hear about you physical problems as well as the dreaded flamers. Most flamers do not offer any real solution to any problems and really do it out of spite; I think. I love to read your story and have not seen any real problems. If people (flamers) do not like the story then they shouldn't read it. Thanks for writing.
- A good story, with an interesting premise so far. I mean, usually voices in the head just mean you're crazy...
As for the scathing reviews you said you've received...ignore them. Flames are, in general, written by morons with nothing better to do, who are jealous of what others have created.
- I like the premise of the story. However, you're clearly struggling with an unfamiliar mode of speech - many of your usages are odd, to say the least - and there were a number of places where you appeared to have dropped off part of a sentence in your struggle to cope with the language you're trying to use.
Secondly, Harry is doing things with no apparent explanation that directly contradict his earlier knowledge and behaviour. I refer here to Lucius Malfoy. While I'm sure you're going to have Harry leverage his position of power to influence Malfoy, the lack of apparent reason was jarring to say the least.
Thirdly, you consistently get a number of names wrong - especially "Parkingson" (Parkinson). That's just plain rude - or ignorant and lazy, take your pick.
All of which is a pity, as I enjoy stories where Harry takes control of his life.
(#) AberforthsAvatar 2008-12-27 03:16:44 PMI like the originality of your changes to canon. Using the trial to force Harry's other issues toward resolution is especially novel. I look forward to seeing where you'll go with the story.
Thanks for sharing it with us.