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Granger Who
17 reviewsHave you ever realized that all you know about Hermione is what she said about herself and what she did in front of others? And that the trio is much too lucky for it to be natural?
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Granger Who
(#) astrok99 2009-01-29
Well this is different! I enjoyed this first chapter. A bit hard to offer advice on a first chapter, but perhaps a bit more depth / background to give added oomph. By that I mean consider a paragraph or two on reactions by other characters, for example Hermione (Rowena) notices Harry clutch scar, what is happening at the staff table?
Hope that helps, CheersGranger Who
(#) minerdude 2009-01-29
be neat, if at some point she tells Harry the truth, I do not think Ron cound handle it, but Harry can.Granger Who
(#) jump_jives 2009-01-29
I must say, that was a really good start. The writing was well done and the story seems pretty original (at least I can't recall reading any like it).
I agree with Astrok that more background would be helpful, but I think it is something that you may want to reveal in small bits over time.
Thank you for sharing.Granger Who
(#) Cateagle 2009-01-29
An original and most interestingly different introductory chapter. I do hope we'll find out more about just how and why she revisits periodically. I'll agree that it's going to be rather interesting if she tells Harry the truth or, perhaps unlikely but possible since he's not magically-raised and doesn't know what's "impossible", he actually manages to suss out who she really is. In any case, I'll most definitely be looking forward to more of this story.Granger Who
(#) DragonBard 2009-01-29
Do the Grey Lady or Bloody Baron recognize her? After all, they've been there for almost as long as the castle has stood. Grey Lady is Rowena's daughter.Granger Who
(#) stick97 2009-01-29
hmmm, I would love to see "the Ravenclaw" start to fall for Harry, (who is actually Gryf-but lost his memory due to the AK) and finally realize they have reunited...
looks great can't wait to see more.
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