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Searching for the Power
(#) zicou 2009-02-03
Outch, that was hot!
Continuuuuue,
Z.Author's response
I like it hot, thats why I sleep in the kitchen next to the Boiler with the house elves.. (shiver) You ever wonder where baby house elves come from? I know, I am going to go scrub my brain with ajax now.Searching for the Power
(#) DragonWing 2009-02-03
Hmm....well it looks like Hermione is going into her umm...I'll call it "hermione mode" and is more than likely going to help set up Harry with multiple witches (even if it's not all at once) at Hogwarts while Harry maintains a friends with benefits relationship with Ginny. It also looks like Ron is nearing his breaking point with his jealousy.
As the timeline goes, it has not been very long but Ron is notorious for his ability to hold a grudge and his jealousy. Unless he and Harry have a good long heart-to-heart, a breakup with Hermione is going to happen in the near future (timeline wise, not chapterwise as I don't know how it's going to be)
I wanted to point out a mistake.
Neville spoke again. "Working backwards, the power to vanquish, couldn't that mean you already fulfilled the prophecy as a baby?" She asked him. But he shook his head.
you put that in near the end of the chapter, but Neville isn't there to say it.Author's response
Lemon drop for you, I'm fixing that right away. Thanks
Close but not close enough to freak me out. But since I am keeping the characters close to Canon only actual teenagers, anyone should be able to predict some of the reactions..
I hope I can still surprise some of you though. I do try hard not to be cliche.Searching for the Power
(#) DrT 2009-02-03
Ron is going to be making some v wrong decisions for all concerned, or at least it looks that way!Author's response
Honestly at this point they probably should not be together. But Ron wants to get into her knickers, and Hermione thinks she can make a real relationship out of it...eventually.
When has Hermione ever failed?Searching for the Power
(#) BlackPhoenix5 2009-02-03
Ok, from what i can see is that Ron is making some bad decisions. Sure, i think that if i had a girl like Hermione now, and she was doing the exact same things, i would rather handle it myself. Ron is too self-centered to think things clearly, and as far as i can see the relationship between Ron/Hermione/Harry is going to end bad...
...but then again, it is your story.Author's response
It is my story, and I will just have to suprise you. But people are starting to see that Ron cares less about Hermione the person, and more about Hermione the only female currenly available to him. Or Hermione the girl he has fantasized about for 2 or 3 years.
It might end badly, or it might just end. Or they might be able to move on as mates, but I doubt it will ever be the same.Searching for the Power
(#) icyflame 2009-02-03
You know, I felt a little bad for Ron at first, even if he was an ass, after all, he's just being the stereotypical guy, but now I don't care. Kill him, or emotionally scar him, or at least put him in the Hospital/Hospital Wing.Author's response
He is an interior designer, perhaps we can turn him gay?
I had not planned on hurting him too badly, Actually I think Hermione might get the worst of it once he has other females to choose from.Searching for the Power
(#) mwinter 2009-02-03
Hermione should know she won't get the emotional relationship from Ron that she can get with Harry. even if she shares Harry with Ginny.Author's response
Yes, and on some level she does know that. But she is scared of losing Harry, and is still infatuated with Ron for some reason.Searching for the Power
(#) DJ32 2009-02-03
Great work with this you are writting a very fun story. I aways look forard to updates and you love keeping me on the edge with this R/Hr thing your doing R is whiped when with Hr but goes all tough guy when he is alone all this half baked plot of his to get H beat up and not get in trouble. Ido not know if I hate him for being a pr*ck or feald bad for him for being whipped. I am quoting you now " Honestly at this point they probably should not be together" If you feal put him out of his pain and let H/Hr get to some gult free fun. That is just my two cents its your fic and I will keep having fun reading it so thanks.
PS One request Ron does Not get Hermione's Cherry. It does not have to go to Harry but it might be nice.Author's response
My Ron is very dynamic. I have known pricks exactly like him who could really care less as long as they are getting some. As for your other point.
No comment.Searching for the Power
(#) Arkenstone007 2009-02-03
I agree with DJ32. Also remember that FF.net doesn't allow for NC-17 stories, there was one story that had to be taken down because it was deemed too explicit by the administrators. It was moved to this site.Author's response
I knew there was a reason for posting here first. I never read anything this good over there.
Not that FF net isnt great! Just not this hot.
Not to toot my own horn, though I sometimes have to after writing a section...
TMI?Searching for the Power
(#) jjracer24 2009-02-03
To my shock and amazement, I couldn't believe that you had three chapters up today. I was only expecting one at the most, kodoes to you. Great additions to the story line and I can't wait to see what's next.Author's response
Yaaaawn make that four, at least before I went to bed. It was so freaking annoying with the server problems last night and this morning. I found away around it by cutting a chapter in half though I have no idea why that worked.
So it was actually only 2 but forced into 3. And I just osted chapter 18 which makes 3 or 4 depending on how you look at it.
Goodnight/morning its 12:30am
Til tommorow! er.. Or Later..or whateverSearching for the Power
(#) Brian64 2009-02-04
Alrighty then..
I have to say that I am impressed with the update rate. I can certainly forgive the occasional homonym mistake given how quickly new chapters come out. Let's face it, by and large the writing is technicaly quite good without too many mistakes, so kudos for that.
The plot... well, let's face it, since the nude occlumency started, it has become something of a PWP, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It's all good fun until someone gets hurt.
Actually, that's where this review comes in.
After reading your reply to DJ32's plea regarding Hermione's cherry, I got a cold shiver down my spine that you didn't put that little question to bed (pardon the pun)
Forgive the obvious, but this is a Harry Potter story, not a Ron Weasley story. The only thing that wil happen if Ron 'gets Harry's girl' is that many of your readers will go into fits of rage, flame you, and dump your story like a hot potato. It's been done before.
Is Hermione Harry's girl in this story - well that's what you implied in your story summary - Hermione showing him love and all that. Therefore, you've tried to attract Harmony fans. Ergo, Hermione is 'Harry's girl'
I don't think you really understand how annoyed Harmony fans get when she ends up with Harry after being with someone else. How is she supposed to be this great love of his life if she's happy to be fooling around with someone else - especially Weasley?
You're already well past my comfort level with her relationship with Ron, so if things stay as they are or get any closer between them then I'm out of here. Frankly, I'm not sure if I will even risk ch.19 since it's possibly going to involve the outcome of Ron's powershake experiment. :(
I guess you gotta ask yourself the question; Do you feel lucky?
I mean... maybe you won't lose too many readers if Ron and Hermione end up shagging, but I can absolutely guarantee you'll lose at least one, and I've seen complaints on some of the yahoo groups about the R/Hr action.
Anyway, if your aim is to annoy Harmony fans, you're doing great. You're not quite at the unforgivable stage, but you're getting there rapidly.
Cheers,
Brian
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