(#) canustakemyheart 2009-02-06Hi ... I'm not sure if I've reviewed before but I've been reading. I was hesitant at first because this story was going to be a "ferard" ... but I actually like the story you've cooked up. It's like a mystery drama.
Anyway, I thought I'd offer the very slightest constructive criticism. Actually it's not a criticism at all really, it's just that if you want to make it sound more "American", just replace a few words ...
Instead of petrol, we say gas.
coloured = colored.
And instead of fringe, we can bangs.
I think that was it =)
(#) smashingpoprocks 2009-02-08i found your story yesterday and i was as well hesetent about the whole ferard thing. but its not what i expected at all and really good so far. i made an account just to say i really hope you update soon. i'm dying to know what happens in the next instalment.
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