[Oneshot- Mikey] There's a fine line between 'stable' and 'breaking down,' and Mikey was sure he had crossed it long ago.
- The thing with breakdowns is that so often,they aren't dramatic. There's just one small thing, quite literally the final straw. And, as you say, it doesn't matter how many things seem good, it can still happen.
This wasn't some dramatic fictional turmoil, this is the sort of thing that happens - it felt real and that's what made it so moving.
Beautiful! And the ending was perfect.
Author's responseI'm not one for that much drama, really. I just had to write a breakdown, 'cause I just needed to cope with something that was happening at the moment.
So thank you for liking it.
(#) _Amy_Revenge_ 2009-03-25 01:27:21 AMI agree with basically everything Sas says.
Especially about the ending. But I'd like to add that the entire story was WONDERFUL lol
Author's responseI don't know, I just didn't like the ending. But you guys did, so I duess that counts. :D
Thank you /tons/.
(#) whitereflections12 2009-04-19 10:42:41 AMI really loved this. The two roughest times I've been through, it's always been something little that set off the worst of it. I think it's because lots of people tend to tell themselves they're dealing with things until there's finally just a moment where it's all overwhelming too much.
I've been working on a oneshot that I can't seem to finish that's between Mikey and Gerard and has to do with Mikey's depression(it's really different than this, though...I think it's...darker? but i'm not finished yet, lol), but I loved how you worked the hope into the end of this...he's not ok, but he wants to try to be.
And, I loved that Bob was the one to be there for him. Usually, when people write something like this, it's Gee or Frank that's there for him, but all of the guys are really really close and it's true, Bob is the only one that wasn't there to watch Gerard fall apart, so he'd be the least...afraid? maybe that's the word.
Anyway, this is really long and ramble-y but point was, this was awesome. :D
Author's responseWell, I'm not one for much drama. I always want to make things as realistic as possible. So I wanted to make his breakdown triggered by something that would seem real. Fortunately for me, I had had a serious breakdown just before I started this story. =|
As for your oneshot, I would be delighted to read it. There aren't many realistic stories on here- although I'm sure that would defeat the purpose of fanfiction, but yeah. Especially if it's between the Mikey and Gerard, because they have the sweetest brotherly bond. I'd love to read that. :]
And Bob? I just love Bob. I didn't even think about that aspect until I was halfway through, and then decided to put it in. x] And I love rambling. It makes me feel good, 'cause then I know that readers are really thinking.
This is rambly, too. x] Thanks for reading, liking, and taking the time to review.
(#) areyounormal 2009-08-12 01:20:43 AMYou know what, I really wanted to read this again. I thought it was great at the time, but that really is an understatement and a half.
The way the story pulls you in, it's like your're watching but you're also Mikey. You feel everything, his pain, his inability to communicate what's wrong and, of course, his own confusion. Because, therein lies the problem with depression - it's rarely one big thing that starts it and, in this case, a simple argument with Bob could easily have been the final straw.
The idea that he was unaware that he was crying was inspired! Along with the realisation of it bringing everything down.
And the ending is perfect because, you don't just fall apart into fits of hysteria. Your brain tries to cope. It's a marvellous thing, the brain. At times like this, it almost tries to distract you. Kinda like "Oooh! Look! There's something shiny!"
Reinvention is an excellent coping technique. It's been my own way of dealing with a lot of things - it's why I play drums.
Anyway, brilliant, absolutely brilliant!!
I'm on the way to the hospital to see a surgeon today and I needed to read this again. It's reminded me that I eventually, can cope with anything.
^^^ In case you don't understand that, that was my brain exploding from that.
I was never trying to make it even slightly good. In all honesty, I was just trying to vent some steam after some chick that was my best friend started going off on me about something that, really, didn't matter. -_- Petty shit, yeah, but it just fucked me up.
(A simple arguement with Bob? That could be the final straw for anyone. Wait, no. I meant that it could be their final moments alive. :P)
As for the idea that he didn't know he was crying until the awkward silence came up, I got that from one day at lunch. The bit about Ray not making a joke was actually my friend Dylan not making some sort of perverted joke and/or trying to tickle/rape me. See, I was all messed up because it was the one-year anniversary of my father-figure dying and I hadn't even realized I was crying until one of my friends pointed it out. I then proceeded to walk outside to the school yard, go into a corner and start screaming my lungs out. :\
And thanks for the ending bit. I never understood how you and Amy liked it until that. It clicks now. Clicks like magnets. Which attracts metal. COINS ARE NOT METAL. D; But a nickel is a coin. SHINY. :D
(..haha. no more soda for Nadia~)
Yeah. Drums. Hitting things = fun. :D
nowayman, thank you,
- I'm a little late to this party...meh well.
Holy. Mother. Of. God. You are an excellent writer. I love how immediately you grab the audience, and you don't let them go until things start looking up for the guy. You word choice is spot on, your verbs are delightful. What an inspiring work.