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• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) growlerlight 2009-03-22

  I like this story Harry is til friends with the old crowd but has a new relationship.

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) bluminous 2009-03-22

  the general idea was good, but it gets confusing to follow the story when you do not type the words like :
  "She said" or He replied or Daphne said etc etc i know its tiring but its crucial for the reader to know who is speaking and where and why.
  the environment is there, a very good plot, but i get confused at who is speaking, especially when they encountered the basilisk.

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) DarQuing 2009-03-22

  I really like the story so far, though the dialogue is somewhat confusing at times.
  
  I'm not sure about the others, but I think Ron should be a snake animagus. Neville could be a lion and Hermione a bird of some kind, maybe a raven.

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) insanetwist 2009-03-22

  I'm not sure if you know this, but Lupin's name is not supposed to be a reference to the word Lunar. It's actually a reference to Lupus, which is Latin for wolf. So, yeah

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) Dariassan 2009-03-22

  Someone should be a platypus... Even god has a sense of humor, after all.

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) DJ32 2009-03-22

  Great work keep it up. My 2 cents on animagus forms Ron/Bear Nev/Lion Gin/Snake & Hermione/Owl just my guess/sugestion I can'wait to see whats next.

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) bls2198 2009-03-22

  great start...please keep it going

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) LordSeagen 2009-03-23

  very good story, I have always had a liking for Harry Daphne stories. Please update soon

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) Maxtaf 2009-03-23

  I really like the way you are handling this. Harry is intelligent and capable, and handles himself well. The others seems to be themselves, but they've really just been introduced, so you have time to add your own flavor.
  
  As for the animagus forms:
  
  Ron: Irritable, aggressive, quick to anger, and ferocious in a fight. Ron is a Wolverine.
  
  Hermione: Smart, freedom-loving, deep as the ocean, willing to help anyone who is drowning in the sea of homework. Hermione is a Dolphin.
  
  Ginny: Flighty, Fiery, intense, tiny, and as at home in the air as Harry is. Ginny is a Merlin. (A tiny falcon)
  
  Neville: The other possibility for TBWL (granting him the potential as Harry, as the prophecy could not have known who Voldie would pick), slow to anger, but incredibly strong and powerful when he is. Neville's first form is a Kodiak Bear. He is also a calm, gentle healer, and a source of wisdom for his friends. Neville is also Snake.
  
  Tracey: Smart, cunning, (and since she is apparently going to be an ally here, I'll improvise) prankster, wicked sense of humor. Tracey is a Coyote.
  
  Blaise: Cool, composed, deadly, stealthy, competent. Blaise is a Black Jaguar.

• Secrets of the Chamber

  (#) red_jacobson 2009-03-28

  Interesting story so far, not much to comment on, but I'm glad that you, so far, seem to be avoiding the character bashing of the Weasley's or Hermione that can be prevalent in Harry/Slytherin stories, so I'm enjoying that part.
  
  Looking forward to more
  
  red

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