(#) IeroMyHero 2009-07-01Hmm, one thing, this is sorta extremely unrealistic. Is it really appropriate that a woman lives in an apartment with a random man whom she just met? That's so weird, like nobody in their right mind would do that, it's just not safe. Just pointing that out.
Otherwise, not bad. I'm curious to see what exactly you meant to do with the plot.
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